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This is solid writing, mate! (I have to admit, I'm a sucker for a daddy muscle growth story.)

As for feedback, my main advice would be to use speech marks to indicate speech, and start a new paragraph for each new speaker. I think that would just sharpen up the flow of your writing.

Hope that helps!

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Hot!  Looking forward to more.  It looks like you were torn about who the narrator was.  Sometimes the narrator says "my", sometimes "you", and sometimes "he/his", all of which refer to Justin.  A quick and easy fix if you go through it one more time.

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